Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays starting their personal
business
is
preffered
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preferred
some
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people
rather than working for some companies.
Although
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working as an employee for someone is
desirable
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option, I personally reckon that having own
business
is a great idea and its benefits
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outweigh
outhweight
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outweigh
the ones
for
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of
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working for the organizations. From the beginning of the
capitalism
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era, the term "entrepreneurship" gained
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great popularity and most
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the
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people
started to build their own businesses to obtain
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great amount of money. After that, they saw that the more they work as an entrepreneur the more they have
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great amount of spare time.
For example
, the businessmen
such
as Jeff Bezos once built "Amazon" and now he is the richest man in the whole world;
therefore
,
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of stories give a motivation for
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people
who want to build their own
business
empires.
On the other hand
, working for someone is a challenging way the
people
choose for themselves and
this
costs them
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a lifelong period. As an employee,
for instance
,
they
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have to obey the rules that managers
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, their time directed in a way that their boss
want
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and for doing
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, the money that they are having does not meet their demands. And
as a result
, they suffer from
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lack of motivation
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and
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debts for solving the problems
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leads
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them to be more
stressful
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and anxious. In conclusion,
business
owners acquire wealth for widening their branches of businesses and outweigh the demerits that employees have when working for the company,
hence
in my point of view cases
such
as starting own businesses will be skyrocketed.
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