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In the last decades, there has been a great increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults. This has been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, however, other students see these courses as less effective than classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online courses?

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In the past ten years, especially for the
last
 two years when the world was
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 from the pandemic of COVID-19, the number of online
courses
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 rapidly thanks to
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technology development,
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 online
courses
 are introduced or
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revolted
revalued
 from classroom teaching. Some
people
 may value
this
 development as an advancement of knowledge learning. A coin has two sides. Some
people
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online
courses
less
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 effective than
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traditional classroom learning,
First
 of all, the leading advantage of online
courses
 is the saving of travelling time.
Instead
 of going to a physical classroom to have lessons,
people
 can start their classes online anywhere with any mobile or computer
devices
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 available.
People
 could save plenty of travelling time and can focus their time on studying.
Secondly
, there are more options available for
people
 to choose for online
courses
 as the geographical location is no longer a restriction to
people
 when they are considering what to study
next
.
People
 could even study
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 online
courses
 locally at home.
However
, as another token, it is difficult to create a sense of learning at home using
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 mobile device.
People
 may be easily distracted by the notification
poped
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 up from the screen while having their classes.
Moreover
, there are fewer chances for students to interact with
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 other if they are studying online. Though there may be some discussion
forum
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forums
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 or
chatroom
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chatrooms
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 available for students to exchange ideas, these kinds of digital communication may not be as valuable as interaction in person for some
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,
for example
,
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counselling
courses
. To sum up, there are pros and cons for each kind of teaching format, students should choose the one which suits them most and brings benefits outweighing costs.
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