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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent decades, online shopping has increased because of the advancement in
technology
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. Today, a large section of society prefers to buy things
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 as clothes and groceries online. Experts throughout the developing and developed worlds have debated whether
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 trend will lead to the closing of retail
shops
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 or whether offline
shops
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 will continue to exist. Personally, I feel that online shopping will take over traditional
shops
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 in the future. In
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 essay, I will give examples from The Times Magazine and Oxford University to demonstrate points and prove arguments. To commence with, the internet has become very popular in the
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 decade.
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, many people are using it to buy clothes, toys, groceries and furniture.
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, online shopping has made our life easy and convenient. Now, we do not have to leave our house and get stuck in traffic going shopping. Everything is available at a click of a button.
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, Oxford University published a paper stating that the number of people shopping online has increased by 40% in the
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 five years.
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, there are numerous new policies introduced by e-commerce giants like Amazon and Flipkart, which have made shopping even more fun. One of the policies is the "try and return policy", which means that now you can try the clothes and return them during the delivery if you don't like them.
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, these online sites give huge discounts, which attract common people. Traditional
shops
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 are not able to keep up with these e-commerce sites because there are numerous stakeholders in between, and they can't afford to sell items at
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 low prices.
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, according to The Times Magazine, the owners of small
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 get 5-10% profit on each item.
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 but not least, the advancement of
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 has made it possible to shop online through virtual reality. In the coming years, artificial
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 will improve even more, and shoppers can buy and try anything by wearing VR goggles. To conclude, there is no limit to online shopping. There is a huge amount of money getting invested in e-commerce and
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 to pull more and more customers. I feel that online shopping has more plus points than offline shopping.
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 of sticking to offline sales, the owners of the retail
shops
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 must set up a way to sell their items online if they want to continue their business.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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