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On vehicle-free day, private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned in the city centre while the public transport is permitted such as bicycle, buses and taxis. Do the benefits of vehicle- day outweigh the disadvantages?

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The
last
 century has witnessed the booming of
car
 industries, and there are more and more cars driving on the road nowadays.
That is
, the introduction of private transportation surely enhances the mobilities of
people
 living in urban.
However
, from my perspective, there is a desperate need for vehicle-free days since the so-called automobile still brings a lot of inconveniences. It is undoubted that the scooter or
car
 brings us to a more convenient world with the soaring proportion of
car
 ownership.
To begin
 with, for those who demand to drive to work every
day
, private transportation allows them to commute to every place even every time. There is no need to concern that leaving the office at midnight and the metro doesn't available.
Also
, it is suitable for commodities that are transited by truck, which is not limited by rail, making it more effective.
Last
 but not least, when we walk or ride bicycles in the city, the weather is a vital condition that we have to confront, while
people
 who are behind the wheel don't
influence
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.
Nonetheless
, a
day
that is
 only for the MRT, cycle and buses still gives a different aspect to the city as it makes
people
 healthier not only physical but mental.
First
 of all, needless to say, taking the subway or train truly reduces air pollution, letting
people
 breathe pure air.
Secondly
, the ban on
automobile
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 prevents pedestrians from getting hurt, decreasing the number of traffic accidents.
Last
 but not least, the
day
car
-free alleviates the circumstances of congestion. During rush hour, it is not weird to see that the road becomes a "dynamic parking place" and the path is filled with loud hink because of the
serve
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 traffic jam. With the
car
-free
day
, we may experience silence, peace and a fast city, which is very worth trying. In conclusion, there is some advantage to riding the scooter or driving
the
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car
 to commute to another place, but if there is an option of a vehicle-free
day
 there is still a lot of advantages that encourage
people
 to give it a shot.
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