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The internet is a great course of information and has opened up opportunities for people to learn all over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control information online?

#internet #course #information #opportunities #people #world #control
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Nowadays society living in an
information
 era and the
internet
 is the greatest actor in
this
 world.
Thus
 , thanks to the
internet
information
 have never been accessible in
the
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human history but, apart from that
information
 pollution is the biggest drawback of the
internet
, is possible, to control the influx of
information
 and make the
internet
 more safety area.
First
 of all, almost everyone has access to the
internet
 and they upload
information
 or any type of data. Unfortunately, they may or may not share
the
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disinformation on the
internet
.
Furthermore
, news sites make
a
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clickbait and exaggerate the headline to involve
attention
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 of more
people
.
Secondly
, there
tons
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 of
information
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ling
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 around without any reference point which has questionable and lack
of
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proofness
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proofs
. These types of things blow up society and later
on
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 no one can deny the truth. As far as I am concerned the wrong
information
 has always existed in human history.
Nevertheless
,
people
 and governments have fought them.
However
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 thanks to the
internet
this
 type of
information
are
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 sharply increased the fight method is not changed.
Firstly
,
people
 should learn formal logic, which was the best method
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 by Aristoteles and
successors
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their successors
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.
Therefore
 all types of science utilize these methods to distinguish the truth from the lie.
Secondly
,
people
 seek
the
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some of the
referance
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reference
 points which pre-verified. In conclusion, the wide range of
internet
 users are couse some
information
pollutions
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 which is one of the biggest problems of the community on the
internet
. There are some
of
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way
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 to prevent
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 situation
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based on our historic experience and knowledge.
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