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The internet is a great course of information and has opened up opportunities for people to learn all over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control information online?

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Nowadays society living in an
information
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 era and the
internet
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 is the greatest actor in
this
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 world.
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 , thanks to the
internet
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information
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 have never been accessible in
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human history but, apart from that
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 pollution is the biggest drawback of the
internet
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, is possible, to control the influx of
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 and make the
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 more safety area.
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 of all, almost everyone has access to the
internet
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 and they upload
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 or any type of data. Unfortunately, they may or may not share
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disinformation on the
internet
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.
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, news sites make
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clickbait and exaggerate the headline to involve
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 of more
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.
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, there
tons
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 of
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lying
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ling
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 around without any reference point which has questionable and lack
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proofness
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proofs
. These types of things blow up society and later
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 no one can deny the truth. As far as I am concerned the wrong
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 has always existed in human history.
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,
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 and governments have fought them.
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However
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 thanks to the
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this
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 type of
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are
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 sharply increased the fight method is not changed.
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,
people
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 should learn formal logic, which was the best method
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 by Aristoteles and
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their successors
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.
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 all types of science utilize these methods to distinguish the truth from the lie.
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,
people
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 seek
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some of the
referance
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reference
 points which pre-verified. In conclusion, the wide range of
internet
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 users are couse some
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pollutions
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pollution
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 which is one of the biggest problems of the community on the
internet
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. There are some
of
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way
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 to prevent
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 situation
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