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Some people believe that social media sites, such as face book or twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In present days , social
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 are
common
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tool
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 for the community. The majority of
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society
are
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 getting used to
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 a lot of time on social
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medias
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such
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 as Twitter, Facebook etc. While
ones
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 argue that social
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 stop a community
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 dating and constructing relationships others state that it
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 assists young
people
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 to arrange personal relationships. In my opinion , social
media
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 helps
people
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 to build
relationship
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relationships
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 very easily and
reasons
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the reasons
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 for that are provided in
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as
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Firstly
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, social
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activities
activites
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activities
 of
ones
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 to others so it gives a great opportunity for getting personal information about
fellow
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the fellow
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 and
general
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 lifestyle of someone.
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 , posting pictures
in
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on
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 social sites introduce to
future
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a future
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 potential partner
about
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his
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or
her
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their
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 interests and hobby so
this
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 helps to know if
people
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 have something in common or not.
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 ,
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 makes
easier
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it easier
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 to build
relationship
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relationships
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 and communication between lovers because having exact imagination about each other from social
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medias
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 breaks any barrier between individuals.Questions which are not convenient to be asked and lack of time could prevent knowing each other thoroughly and quickly .So, facebooks and other social tools are
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a great
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place
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 for
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dating.
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, social websites can explore if a person is single or not.
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 , if a man
married
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 , he will definitely post his family's pictures and
also
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 his friends on his social pages
are
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 one of
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evidence
about
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 his personal life.
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 to that , social
media
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 is a
mitigated
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 tool for
quick
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a quick
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 chat in case if persons are extremely busy with their everyday activities and work. In conclusion , social
media
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 is definitely getting popular nowadays. In my opinion , social
media
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 have
positive
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a positive
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 impact
for
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on
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 building
relationship
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a relationship
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 because they don't disclose
personal
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the personal
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 lives of a person,gives information about
marriage
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 status and
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alleviate
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communication. If dating
people
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 will communicate on social
media
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 it will help them to faster knowing each other and start dating.
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