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Some people become famous at a very young age. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In today’s world, very young
people
 with unique talents can easily get the spotlight through various social media platforms. Social media today has enormous power to make
people
 famous overnight. But to be famous at a very young
age
 can have several advantages and disadvantages which need to be carefully considered. In
this
 essay, we will explore the pros as well as cons of
people
 who become famous at a very young
age
 and how it impacts their lives.
People
 who become famous at a young
age
 become more independent than their peers of the same
age
 group. As with
fame
 comes monetary benefit which makes them financially stable. Financial stability makes them self-sufficient at a very young
age
 and they are
also
 able to help out their parents and other family members financially. Every individual likes to be appreciated and praised for the work they do. When very young
people
 become famous, they get appreciated by a huge segment of the population, which boosts their confidence and self-esteem. But there are many disadvantages of getting famous at a very young
age
. Since young individuals are not mentally mature, they do not know how to handle
fame
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 and how to conduct themselves in public.
This
 leads to many young celebrities getting lonely and depressed, withdrawn from public
life
. Since they get famous at an early
age
, they think education is not needed and many young celebrities drop out of school and do not learn the important
life
 skills required to survive in the real world. They do not have the understanding that
life
 is unpredictable and
fame
 is volatile.
Fame
 gets to their head and they behave recklessly and are devoid of humility. We can see that being famous at a young
age
 has many advantages in terms of independent decision making but it can simultaneously be treated as a disadvantage as well if not monitored and if the young child isn’t inculcated with the important
life
 values.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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