Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents's responsibility; while others think, it shoud be the government's duty. What is your opinion?

Nowadays, the number of
people
in closed society including small neighbourhoods and towns increasing day after day,
accordingly
social duties vary and change including the clean environment. While some
people
argue that it's the residents' responsibility for each neighbourhood, others claim
this
should be led by the
government
as part of its responsibility, I believe that in most cases clean cities are
people
's duty.
Firstly
, I think having a clean
city
shouldn't be subjected to a specific party, uncleaned streets will be developed to be
dangerous
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place full of disease and other harmful shapes,
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each person in his close society should be responsible for his own action, in my views we should think in
this
as your home, if you don't always clean house and take the garbage out, it will be ended having a bad and dangerous place to live in it.
Moreover
, the
government
is not always available to watch every single street including side streets and alleys, even if the local
city
council is applying a tax to support
this
service but it remains the residents' responsibility to report for unwilling actions committed by others to keep their
city
clean, another thing to be considered that
government
always takes some time to process complaints and act
accordingly
,
consequently
this
will lead to the unorganized
city
.
Finally
, despite many claims and assumptions about the
government
's role in cleaning neighbourhoods, I have never seen a clean
city
without its own residents' support including in my home town. Taking everything into consideration,
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would say that contemporary local management led by society should create awareness campaigns to have
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clean place including
people
and the
government
together.
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