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Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents's responsibility; while others think, it shoud be the government's duty. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, the number of habitants in closed societies including small neighbourhoods and towns increasing day after day,
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 social duties vary and change including the clean environment. While some people argue that it's the residents' responsibility for each neighbourhood, others claim
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 should be led by the
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 as part of its responsibility. I believe that in most cases clean cities are people's duty.
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, I think having a clean
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 should not be subjected to a specific party, uncleaned streets will be developed to be a dangerous place full of disease and other harmful shapes.
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, each person in his close society should be responsible for his own action.
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, we should think of
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 as your home.
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, if you do not always clean the house and take the garbage out, it will be ended having a bad and dangerous place to live in it.
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, the
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 is not always available to watch every single street including side streets and alleys, even if the local
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 council is applying a tax to support
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 service but it remains the residents' responsibility to report for unwilling actions committed by others to keep their
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 clean. another thing to be considered is that
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 always takes some time to process complaints and act
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.
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,
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 will lead to an unorganized
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.
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, despite many claims and assumptions about the
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's role in cleaning neighbourhoods, I have never seen a clean
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 without its own residents' support including in my home town. Taking everything into consideration, I would say that contemporary local management led by society should create awareness campaigns to have a clean place including people and the
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 together.
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