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Many countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. Is this a positive or negative development?

Importing a large portion of
food
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 from other parts of the country is essential in many countries, and
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 development has its pros and cons. In the modern globalised economy,
food
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 is transported across continents, allowing individuals to enjoy products grown far beyond their borders.
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 trend offers benefits
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 as variety and economic growth, it
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 presents drawbacks, for example, environmental harm and loss of local
food
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 culture. Importing meat gives consumers access to a wider variety of products all year round.
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, tropical fruits
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 as mangoes or avocados are available in European supermarkets even during winter, thanks to
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 from Latin America and Africa.
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 not only satisfies consumer demand
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 but
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 promotes international trade, boosting economic ties between countries and creating jobs in the agricultural export sector.
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, from a consumer and trade perspective, importing
food
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 can be seen as a positive development.
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, transporting
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 over long distances has significant environmental costs.Shipping goods thousands of kilometres requires fossil fuels, which contribute to greenhouse gas emissions and climate change.
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, importing apples from New Zealand to the UK involves substantial carbon emissions compared to locally grown produce.
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 reliance on long-distance
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 undermines efforts to reduce carbon footprints and can harm the planet in the long run.
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, the environmental damage caused by excessive
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imports
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 makes
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 practice unsustainable. In conclusion,
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food
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imports
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 provide variety and economic opportunities, their environmental impact and threat to local agriculture outweigh the benefits. Countries should aim for a balanced approach, importing only what cannot be grown locally
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 investing in sustainable domestic production.

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task
Task: say your main view at once and keep to one main idea in each part. Give clear proof for each idea.
coherence
Coherence: use easy link words like also, but, so. Make the flow clear and easy to read.
language
Language: use short, simple sentences and common words. Check small errors and spell simple words right.
strength
Clear view on the topic
strength
Good use of real examples from far lands
structure
Ends with a balance idea

Your opinion

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