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Some young people find school difficult and leave early without any qualifications. What causes this problem and what measures could help reduce it?

#people #school #qualifications #measures
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Most youth people encounter
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third level
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education
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 complicated and quit their
education
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 without obtaining a degree. The main cause of
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 phenomenon is using too much social
media
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 because they find several ways to make
money
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 easily, and the most viable solution is to control social
media
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 with stronger regulations on the data posted on websites.
Firstly
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, many of these pre-teens decided to abandon their
education
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 because they can make a lot of
money
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 without attending a university, so they start uploading videos or pictures hoping they become viral, so they can be paid with a lot of
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.
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, not always
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 method work as
they
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expected and many of them end up losing time and their
education
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.
As a result
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, many of these students are jobless and uneducated because they were trapped by using online apps.
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, in The United States, many
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 students are quitting their
education
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, and
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instead
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 they upload information about
traveling
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,
make ups
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 tutorials, and funny videos. Some of them went viral, and they believe
this
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 method is the new way to become famous and affluent. The most viable solution is to control social
media
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 with strict regulations on what is
post
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 and the intention of
this
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 information.
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, it should be stricter regulations on the information, and the veracity of
this
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 data to avoid confusion among
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younger
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youngers
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younger
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 students who are easily influenced.
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, social
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 should avoid
post
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 the amount of
money
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 a person is
payed
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paid
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 by uploading funny videos to avoid
motivated
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motivating
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 young people on
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this
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 activities.
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, In the country of China, in 2021, it
was state
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 by the
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government
governmet
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government
 that a person who
upload
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uploads
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 a video or an informative article must present a licence number as a professional or legal
penalties
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penalty
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this
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 person should
face
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. In conclusion,
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is
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is
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frequent
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to
ot
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to
 hear that young citizens are
unisnterested
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uninterested
interested
on
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in
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 obtaining a degree
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because
becasue
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because
 they find
too
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it too
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 difficult to
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acquire
acquiere
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acquire
 a license, and they find
easier
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an easier
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way
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ways
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 to make
money
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 by using the variety of methods posted on a website.
This
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 can be prevented by
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controlling
controling
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controlling
 websites and social
media
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 with high penalties on data uploaded that might negatively influence young generations.
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