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Governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move from large cities to regional areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages？

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Nowadays, city areas are very congested because of schools hospitals and factories .
Therefore
 ,
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the administration
theadministration
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the administration
 took part in a campaign about the transfer of firms and trade toward
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countryside .In
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 and drawbacks of that argument. To start with
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drawbacks
 , relocation charges ,
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 about
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 and shortfall of service are the major negative impacts .
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 , the innovation of new buildings in villages having very expensive .Because
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 of the structure .
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, poverty of heat is the major failure of
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toward
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lands Due to
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 lack , the factories use their own service which was manufactured from fuels . On
this
 day , fuel prices are hiking that's why
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product
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the product
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 is
also
 expensive .
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 , according to the report published by the " Times " in
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 soap is very cheap when
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re
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 toward
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the backside
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then
 it became very expensive .Before its
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construction
contruction
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construction
 price of soap is likely 2$ after that it becomes 5$ per piece
Besides
 , the sewerage system,
traffic
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and traffic
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 problems are reduced and better roads are the major advantages
for
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removal
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 of the urban structure toward rural space .To illustrate
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, In cities sewage systems are not well because factories drain out their fossils in a canal .
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come
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 from chimneys
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 the atmosphere and global warming .On contrary , it is better in less populated
reigons
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regions
 because free land
available
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is available
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 for drainage .
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 to that , in
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the countryside
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 there
are
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 no blockage was
occured
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occurred
 on roads because
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 areas are less populace and manufactured products
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 to
thestore
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the store
 at the right time .For knowledge , According to a survey
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 in California in the year 2018 health problems and congestion on roads
was surged
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 approximately 70% after
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construction of franchises in landscapes . In conclusion , health and drainage issues are severe in cities . That's why
,
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big fishes move toward rural areas .
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, the benefits of
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re-location
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re location
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relocation
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 of structures are better environment and bread and butter for poors . While
,
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 the failure of service and accessible materials is help failure of argument.
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