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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. they say that the only way to increase recycling is for government to make it legal requirement. To do you think lawd was needed to make people recycle more of their waste.

#people #waste #home #government #requirement #lawd
Many
people
 believe that the waste from home is recycled
that
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 is impossible. They think that
government
 should take a step to extend the recycling process to make it a legal requirement. I am
also
 of
same
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 mind and
i
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I
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 will explicate some logical
reason
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reasons
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 to support my point of view. To commence with the view of
agreement
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, some citizens who are uneducated, they did not know about harmful objects which cannot be
dcompose
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decompose
decomposed
 and directly affected environment. so that,
Government
 have to take action to make some rule and
also
 organise some exhibitions in every City to encourage
people
 and explain how to use objects.
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, plastic bags did not completely
vanished
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 even after
burn
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burning
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it
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them
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. so
persons
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people
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 have to use jute bags which can be used again and again. In a survey conducted by
British
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the British
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government
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,government
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 it was found that most
of
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the plastic
bag
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bags
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 were used in slum areas due to the individuals in these areas
were
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being
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 unschooled.
Secondly
, some
people
 who know about
recycling
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the recycling
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 process
nevertheless
,
they
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apply
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do not reuse some products some municipal
authority
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authorities
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 should apply a fine on those
peoples
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people
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. Shifted towards a view of disagreement, some
people
 claim that
no
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not
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 enough of the waste from home is recycled because they,
says
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say
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 that most of the waste is released from factories. That's why
executive
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executives
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take
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 some action against these factories. To conclude
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this
, I agree with
this
 statement to
government
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the government
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have
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has
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 to make it a lawful condition to improve
reusing
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the reusing
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 process.
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