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Parents are the best teachers. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #teachers
Mothers and fathers can be excellent educators for their
children
. In my view, I agree with
this
 view and think that education given by
parents
 is more significant and beneficial.
Firstly
,researches show that
children
 with good nurturing in
initial
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 stages have appropriate behaviour in their future life. Foremost, being a sophisticated motivator and supporter is a recipe for shaping the best teacher. A survey was conducted by local authorities which showed that a lot of things
children
 learn from their
parents
. And of course, all
parents
 know their
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children's
childrens
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 character,
behavior
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behaviour
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, temperament, and treat them
accordingly
 and educate them as much as possible.
For instance
, a newborn baby does not know anything, and his
parents
 teach him to walk, speak and eat, drink.
Secondly
, definitely, teachers and friends have a special contribution
in
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children
 learning. In
school
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children
 learn discipline, which is
sometime
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 hard to learn at home.
In addition
, they learn academic, nature, humanity and sports subjects studies in school. A good education for
children
 is very important for their future.
For example
, it is possible to achieve great success by mastering many subjects at school.
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Moreover
Morever
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Moreover
, sometimes
children
 learn a lot
with
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 their peers. In
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, undoubtedly, both learned from
parents
 at home and learned from teachers
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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