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Parents are the best teachers. Do you agree or disagree

#parents #teachers
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It is considered that
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 mother and father play a pivotal role in
children
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’s development. Personally, I believe that the
first
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 priority of
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 ought to be teaching their own
children
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 and I completely agree with
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 statement.
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 statement. On the one hand,
parents
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 should take the
first
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 responsibility
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 their
children
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 since it is the primary duty of
parents
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 to teach them to do and to construct the essential and initial things of life.
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, when someone
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a
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birth to a child, it becomes the
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initial
intial
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initial
 responsibility of
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 to teach their
children
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 to talk, walk, write and
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 of necessary things that they
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to be aware of.
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Furthermore
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, in
fact
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 the initial education of young generations should be
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taught
thought
tought
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taught
 by their
parents
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.
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, encouraging the
children
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 to learn education is
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 the main priority of public school teachers since teachers are
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 considered one of the major manner who leads young human beings to be educated and successful person in the future.
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, there are
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 other sources
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available
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 as social media for young mankind that can replace teachers as any kind of data that has to be
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taught
tough
thought
tought
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taught
 to
children
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 is widely available on the internet.
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,
majority
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 of public schools in
UK
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has
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 allowed their students to utilize the internet
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 the purpose of getting
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knowledge
knowladge
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knowledge
by
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 the aid of
the
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social media since it’s
more
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 suitable and affordable way of learning. To
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recapitulate
, having weighed everything mentioned up, I can come to a conclusion
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that despite the certain ways of getting educated by various sources,
parents
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considered
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to be
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 the major aspect of constructing the young generation.
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