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With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The chart illustrates information on the revenue of the three bakeries in London for over ten
years
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. In general, it can be seen that there was a significant rise in Bernie’s Buns and Robbie’s Bakery from 2000 to 2010 whilst Lovely Loaves made a huge decrease in sales from 80,000
pounds
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 down to 40,000
pounds
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 for the period of 10
years
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. In 2000, Bernie’s Buns began the year with 20,000
pounds
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earnings
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 while Robbie’s Bakery had more which was approximately around 55,000
pounds
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. At
first
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, Bernie’s Buns had a fluctuation in its profit for 3
years
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 and it was able to stabilise in the year 2003-2005 before making a growth reaching to more than 60,000
pounds
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 in 2010. In Robbie Bakery’s situation, its
earnings
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 remained steady which is around 55,000
pounds
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 for the
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 5
years
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 and became twice higher in 2010.
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Lovely Loaves bakery, it had the highest
earnings
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 in its
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 4
years
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 reaching 80,000
pounds
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 to almost 100,000
pounds
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 compared to the other two bakeries.
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, as
years
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 went by, its
earnings
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 went through a series of fluctuations until they dropped to 40,000 in 2010 making it the lowest profit among the two.
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