Nowadays, some sick people are using alternative medicine and treatment more than past, instead of visiting doctors. Some positive and negative effects maybe obtain as this issue but in my opinion negative affects are more.

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alternative
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drugs and
treatment
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treatments
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instead
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of working
professional
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physicians is more
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than past.
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, Those
people
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believe that using chemical
medicine
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is dangerous for
human
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the human
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body and when
people
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use them for curing their diseases, it could be harmful and make some kind of side
effects
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.
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, when
people
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use sleep pills after some months they would addict to them and could not live
without
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themwithout
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.
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, the historical records of using
alternative
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treatment
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treatments
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is
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are
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back to many years ago so, many
people
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from
past
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the past
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were using them without any hesitation.
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as
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Persian
people
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that used herbal
medicine
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in their countries
more
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for more
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than 2000 years.
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, there are logical thoughts about
alternative
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drugs and treatments.
On the other hand
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,
alternative
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medicine
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could bring some
unfavorable
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effects
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and professional doctors are worrying about
this
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issue. As scientists do not accept
this
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kind of treatment because of
lack
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a lack
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of research history. As
a
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technology is been increasing, it
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effects
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affects
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on
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medical science too. So, the side
effects
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of drugs are less than past.
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Moreover
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they do
many
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research about all
kind
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kinds
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of diseases and problems and do not approve any curing system without significant documents.
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, you can trust
to
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your doctor and use your
medicine
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without any doubt. In conclusion,
although
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alternative
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medicine
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and treatments have been increased
but
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in my
idea
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,idea
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it has more drawbacks
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of benefits and
people
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should notice
about
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that.
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