Nowadays, some sick people are using alternative medicine and treatment more than past, instead of visiting doctors. Some positive and negative effects maybe obtain as this issue but in my opinion negative affects are more.
Replacing
alternative
drugs and treatment
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treatments
instead
of working professional
physicians is more Change preposition
with professional
interested
than past. Replace the word
interesting
First
, Those people
believe that using chemical medicine
is dangerous for human
body and when Add an article
the human
people
use them for curing their diseases, it could be harmful and make some kind of side effects
. For instance
, when people
use sleep pills after some months they would addict to them and could not live without
. Correct pronoun usage
themwithout
Second
, the historical records of using alternative
treatment
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treatments
is
back to many years ago so, many Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
from past
were using them without any hesitation. Correct article usage
the past
As like
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Like
as
Persian Change preposition
apply
people
that used herbal medicine
in their countries more
than 2000 years. Change preposition
for more
Hence
, there are logical thoughts about alternative
drugs and treatments.
On the other hand
, alternative
medicine
could bring some unfavorable
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unfavourable
effects
and professional doctors are worrying about this
issue. As scientists do not accept this
kind of treatment because of lack
of research history. As Correct article usage
a lack
a
technology is been increasing, it Remove the article
apply
effects
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affects
on
medical science too. So, the side Change preposition
apply
effects
of drugs are less than past. Moreover
they do Add a comma
,Moreover
many
research about all Replace the quantifier
much
kind
of diseases and problems and do not approve any curing system without significant documents. Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
As a result
, you can trust to
your doctor and use your Change preposition
apply
medicine
without any doubt.
In conclusion, although
alternative
medicine
and treatments have been increased but
in my Remove the conjunction
apply
idea
it has more drawbacks Add a comma
,idea
instead
of benefits and people
should notice about
that.Change preposition
apply
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