Life in many cities around the world is becoming so expensive that one day only rich people will be able to live there. What are the causes of this situation? What measures could be taken to solve the problem?

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It is now more common in every

city

in all regions becoming luxury and that leads to only the one who afford can to

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stay there. there are many causes of

this

effect and there are

are

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also

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a solution

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to tackle

this

global problem. in

this

,essay we discuss the problems and how to solve them.

To begin

with, the main point of

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problem is every individual wants to enjoy rich life so that they are buying and wasting money on unnecessary

things

. and for ,

this

the

city

is now only

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things

that are only expensive.

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, now most of the

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had a large number of expensive restaurants and hospitals.

Moreover

, the mindset of people is that only paying school fees can only option for better education for children and that leads to the education system in the

city

being more expensive than any other resource.

Hence

, people now only think that only products or other

things

with a high monetary value are only the best. To tackle

this

problem, the government should be aware everyone that not all expensive

things

give benefits. For that government should arrange talks to aware people and guide them.

Furthermore

, folks should

also

have to teach their children about

this

topic and ask for their opinion so that in future kids know that not only expensive

things

give them satisfaction.

Thus

this

can help everyone in the

city

from the poor to the rich to enjoy

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life in the

city

. To sum up, not every expensive thing

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satisfactory but lower-value items and activities

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satisfy you.

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