Some people believe academic success depends mostly on having a good teacher.others argue that is is the attitude of the student that matters most.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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tutor, some people think that it relies on student
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extremely vital for
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to obtain academic results.
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teacher
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should be capable to explain different difficult topics to
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to be more fascinating.
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tools, which assist to display information by
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some information on a display.
However
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it can be so effective. Another point to consider is that self-
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a big part of
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not able to achieve to desired results in universities. They should
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on their
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studying
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studying
and excel
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time
management, which is crucial. Overall, while a certain category of people believes that academic success is on a good tutor, I think that
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their self-
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study
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processing
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need more
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capacity
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must spend more
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not enough learn only at university
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