Some people believe that to be a successful sportsperson, one needs to have a natural ability. Others think that hard work and practice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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successful
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sportsperson
to human society is visible
everyone
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about natural
ability
. Nowadays, humans are dependent on the mercy of natural
ability
, hard
work
and practice.
This
essay will discuss
both
sides of the argument and come to a logical conclusion.
First
and foremost, there are many reasons in
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of the argument. The best explanation is that the value of
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natural
naturel
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natural
ability
is appreciated by us whenever we are in a difficult situation.
For example
in a survey conducted by leading researchers, most people have positive feedback on natural
ability
aout be a
succesful
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successful
sportsperson
however
ıf a
sportsperson
hasn't got natural
ability
, is not
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succesful
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successful
enough for it.
Hence
, it is irrefutable, that we cannot ignore
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outcome of the given notion
On the contrary
, others think that hard
work
are
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very important for
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people
also
my opinion that
a
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person has got
ability
a task but isn't enough hard
work
, don't arrive good level
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a result.
Hence
, either a natural
ability
and hard
work
are
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up will
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and grade
succesful
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successful
. The justification is that on occasion where we need the help of
both
views because
both
of
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the
effect
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the
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human life. When we
are
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look
a famous sportsmen
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famous sportsmen
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, we can see hard
work
every day and all time
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footballer
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.
Therefore
, one can postulate that
this
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scenario
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scenario
that
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has to be seen. Whenever we think of natural
ability
and hard
work
, a mixed feeling surrounds us and leaves us wondering how the future will be.
However
, after discussing
both
sides, one can conclude that if we have natural
ability
and hard
work
, we will
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succesful
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successful
a
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sportsperson
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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