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In some countries older people are being encouraged to work longer and not to retire. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working beyond retirement age.

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On the one hand, the aged population are advised to engage themselves even after attaining retirement
age
, in order to have financial independence and be physically active.
Firstly
,
this
 is the
age
 to take a break and enjoy the remaining life,
however
, monetary support creates hurdles. Some countries have
a
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pension
schemes
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 for that
age
 group and some do not have
such
 facilities, in the
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later
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 case, to earn their bread and butter they depend on their self-income source.
For example
, in
the
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 country like India, where no
such
 retirement benefit is provided by authorities, people used to work during their retirement
age
.
Furthermore
, the body of a person loses its energy with growing
age
, whereas,
this
 might not get faded if a person keeps themselves engaged in some work.
For instance
, Mr Balwant is at the
age
 of 70, working in its small confectionary shop is more healthy, as compared to, Mr Ramesh who is retired and resting at his home all day.
Hence
, it is better for them to keep moving their body,
also
instead
 of depending on others to earn their own money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • standard of living
  • ameliorated
  • mentoring
  • physical health
  • mental decline
  • workforce diversity
  • exacerbate
  • quality of life
  • employment opportunities
  • work-life imbalance
  • ageism
  • retirement planning
  • pension funds
  • job market dynamics
  • seniority
  • compulsory retirement age
  • productive capacity
  • intergenerational collaboration
  • mentality
  • employer attitudes
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