Topic: People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
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technology
tecnology
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tranports
systems. Correct your spelling
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people's
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the same
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big development in their nations. Correct your spelling
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a person
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problems
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independence
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responsibilities
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employees
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their
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communicate
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fewer
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