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Students should choose a university major that prepares them for high-paying jobs, To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#students #university #jobs
Nowadays, All universities
provides
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a student with what subject they want
in
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after completing college. and
then
 prepared for very well-paid job opportunities in the
future
. I totally agree with
this
 notion and
i
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 discuss my perspective in the upcoming fourth paragraphs.
To begin
 with the agreement, All younger students are prepared for the university major they choose and practice for their own way and life. To explain, Most of the world-famous international universities provided
the
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great features for their student to help in the
future
 because technology is
advance
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 day by day and
it's
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beneficial
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 effect on learners.
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, In
United
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kingdom
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 the university of Cambridge
reveal
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 that most
of
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the
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student in Britain has
the
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 great ability to learn what they choose their major as
a
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 most common major is computer science it's great job opportunities and high-paid salaries.
Thus
, most of the students it's well prepared for their business problems and situations
it
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 helps in
the
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future
 success in life. To commence with the disagreement, It has many negative effects for their
future
 child and
econonmy
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economy
economic
 effect as well. To explicated, It's effect
for
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well-paid task opportunities apply any international company required skills for their base of the major.
For instance
, In ,Russia the great roman empire has high-paying jobs for their one soldier and it's rising in their economic growth as well as required responsibilities.
Hence
, in All ,nations it's not very well for the rich countries
compare
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 to the poor
one
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 and it's a huge impact on their
unemployment
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 people. In conclusion,
Although
 universities and major is the same way as well-paid jobs.
Moreover
, when the students choose their major for their own taste and experience it's useful in the
future
 time and good jobs chance available in the
next
 years time.
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