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average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

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 how the amount of CO2 discharged by individuals in 4
seperate
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 countries
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 in a 40-year period from 1967 to 2007. All the statistics are given in metric
tonnes
. It can be clearly noted that all the figures underwent dramatic changes and after 40 years, the rankings of these 4 nations were not the same as the original. Starting at nearly 2 metric
tonnes
 at the beginning of the process, Portugal's CO2 emissions per person witnessed a substantial rise to
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 2 and approximately 4
tonnes
 in 1987. Quite
similarly
, in Italy, each citizen released more CO2 into the atmosphere as time passes when the figure increased by 2 metric
tonnes
 after 10 years.
In contrast
, while Britain had their levels reduced gradually to precisely 10
tonnes
 in that same period, Sweden's figure had soared to over 10
tonnes
 before experiencing a remarkable fall by almost 3
tonnes
 in 1987. From 1987 on,
this
 trend continued and
therefore
 resulted in the
variation
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 of positions. Even though CO2 emissions kept on falling slowly and steadily by nearly 1 ton per 10 years in Britain, the country still ranked
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first
 with over 8
tonnes
 of emissions. Both Italy and Portugal had a regular increase and both reached
its
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 peak in 2007 with nearly 8
tonnes
 and 6
tonnes
, respectively. Meanwhile,
this
 in Sweden plummetted to a bottom of 5
tonnes
, which is exactly the same as Portugal.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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