Some people say that artists such as painters, writers and musicians affect our life more than scientists. TO what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience.

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occupation
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like writers and
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musicians
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impact
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to experts. I totally disagree with
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reasons in the upcoming fourth paragraphs.
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artists
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a good amount of money and modern public figure as well. To
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explain
, Scientists and modern
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task even these
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enviroment
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environment
need and clean because modern arts subject will be rising up in the
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universities
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occupation is
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as
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.
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, The
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workers
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great
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beneficial impact
in
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the nation's
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economy
ecnonmy
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economy
and
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this
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workers
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will be
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successful
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impact
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as well in their
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because their earn a chunk of money and bad habits will
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rise
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in their own body
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alcohol
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drink and drugs. To explicated, There
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various
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of bad habitats in
painters
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painters'
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work
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because their
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is very
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different
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different
and hard
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impact
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their
life
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Australian news channel said that
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Sydney has a big effect
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drugs
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dealers
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smuggling
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in common and most
of
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crimer
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crime
crimes
caught by police reveal many
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belong
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in
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artists
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works as musicians.
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, it's will be
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for their
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reputation
repuation
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reputation
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community
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the community
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. In conclusion,
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of
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artists
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workers
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will be beneficial for their
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society
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society
and
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.
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their chance as
a
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celebrities
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in public because some
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will
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the truth.
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