In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very imporatant for people why might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

communities all over the world have different perspectives on owning their own
home
or staying on rental. Two of the main reasons are geographical and emotional factors. In Asian culture
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more likely to own your own
home
rather than be on rental for a long period. But in Western countries communities are likely to move from one
area
to another which
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them
to
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rent
places to live. Owning your own
home
has its own pros and cons.
To begin
with
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You require a huge investment
to
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for a new
home
which
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you will not have
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return on investment immediately or in near future.
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no matter where you go in the world for travel or any other reason you have the feeling of security that you have your own place somewhere in the world.Even though some people
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really
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likes
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to own
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their
thier
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their
own
home
to live they sometimes fail to achieve that goal due to financial instability and due to the reasons like not being able to take housing loans. Renting on the other side
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has
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positive
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positive
and negative outcomes.
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people need a very low or no investment to
rent
a
house
.
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they can
rent
a
house
in an
area
where they will never dream to own a
house
.It
also
give
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a feeling of satisfaction when your
area
of living is as per your dreams.On a more conservative note,
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likely that you spend your part of the income that you may have paid to
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a housing loan where you have a property to call your own which you can even sell at a point where
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in need of money. In my view as
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Asian
a
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person
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I believe that owning your
house
is more advantageous than living on
rent
. It's a secure place to live in a long term and you
also
don't have the hassle of shifting from one place to another with
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lot of furniture and other
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owners
awnings
ownings
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owning
. Other than the factor that you get to live in
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area
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you cannot afford a
house
, I believe
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a negative solution to continue living on rental rather than owning your
home
as
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a waste of your preciously earned money from your tiring jobs.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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