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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extend do you agree?

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In
society
,
scientists
 and
experts
 seem to be more important than
musicians
 and
artists
. Modern
society
 needs
experts
 and
scientists
 to bring more
technology
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 things.
However
,
Artists
 and
musicians
also
 play
an
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a
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 role in
society
. On one hand, the more important value of modern
society
 is
scientists
 and
technology
experts
. They
work
 hard to bring change in
society
 and provide our latest
technology
for example
 computers, machines, auto machines, etc. In recent years, when there were no
technology
people
 did not aware
what
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 to do. They really did hard
work
 for themselves. But nowadays,
technology
 is growing fast. All
work
done
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is done
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 by machines. There is no need for
people
 to do all kinds of
work
. Most
work
 is done by
technology
 like cashiers doing all their jobs on computers and
doctors
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 prescriptions are all done by computer. There is no need for paper and pen to write a prescription by the doctor
that is
 why they play an important part in the community and
i
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I
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 agree.
On the other hand
,
musicians
 and
artists
 are only for the enjoyment of
society
. They perform their songs for fun and enjoyment. They create some smiles and excitement
to
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for
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 the
people
 of the community. In conclusion, The importance of
experts
 and
scientists
 is more important than anyone else.
However
,
musicians
 and
artists
also
 play role in
the
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society
.They give relaxing moments and fun time to
people
. As a
,
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 result both play an important role in
society
 but
experts
 are more important because they make life easy to make better products.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • modern society
  • scientists
  • technology experts
  • musicians
  • artists
  • reliance
  • scientific advancements
  • practical benefits
  • driving economic growth
  • daily lives
  • culture
  • human emotions
  • express ideas
  • provoke thought
  • spiritual well-being
  • emotional well-being
  • preserving cultural heritage
  • subjective nature
  • diversity
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