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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Many people believe that, it is more comfortable to live in the big urbanized cities. Do you agree or disagree?

It is true that
people
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 prefer to live in
the
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huge
cities
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 for
its
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their
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 more affluent features. I completely with
this
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 view and think that living in
the
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well-urbanized
cities
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 is much more beneficial and convenient for
people
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’s  life.
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 of all, inhabiting
in
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the
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urban areas is much more worthwhile to find
the
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a
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 job easily. There are too many kinds of jobs which everyone simply
find
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finds
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 himself or herself favourite and suitable work who has a talent on the field. Take an example, the science Isaak Nyton
had
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lived in
the
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a
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 well-urbanized megalopolis, and
as a result
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 of
this
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 condition was able to do lots of
experiment
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experiments
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, after he became one of the famous
science
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with
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 creating the
first
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 lamp.
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, 
cities
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altering
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alter
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 the preferable choices of humans to live in, because of
its
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their
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 handy sides.
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 of all, living in the
cities
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create
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creates
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the
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far more comforts for not only children
or
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of
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 average age but
also
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 elderly
people
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.
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, there are many types of transportation available day and night which can
makes
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people
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 work easy. Take
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for
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 example, my uncle has been living in the urbanized city for a number of years,  and
this
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 place already has produced
good
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a good
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 pasture for
him
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his
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work
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 and achieved career progression  within
the
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a
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 short time.
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,
people
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 should choose
the
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a
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 suitable place where can generate contentment for himself or herself life. To recapitulate, I strongly believe that
to live
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living
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 in
the
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an
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 urbanized city is more advantageous
,
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 because  there might be
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of occupations who can find
the
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a
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 job easily and
this
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 kind of place is acceptable  for every
types
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type
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 of
ages
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age
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 with its good condition.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban aesthetics
  • promoting tourism
  • boosting local economies
  • enhancing residents' quality of life
  • mental well-being
  • functional design
  • urban challenges
  • population density
  • transportation
  • housing
  • conflict between beauty and functionality
  • urban planning
  • aesthetic appeal
  • practicality
  • case studies
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