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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Certain
people
 are employed at the same company for their entire
career
 whereas certain
people
 tend to switch to different companies.
However
, in my ,opinion while I feel it is good to be employed in different companies, I agree that there are some
people
 who work in the same organisation for their entire
career
.
People
 tend to
change
 to different employers, primarily to achieve or excel in their careers faster. It could be due to a promotion, better remuneration or even better job satisfaction. It is said that around 65% of successful
individuals
 have been employed in many industries. While some stick to the same company and designation, some others feel like changing companies for their growth in a shorter period of time. The
second
 reason,
individuals
change
 jobs is to gain more experience in different avenues. The new job will expose
people
 to a new working culture, a new set of
people
 (internal and external) , new working conditions, and a new environment and it could be even a new industry.
This
 could be a very exciting opportunity and help
individuals
 to adapt to
change
.
However
, when
individuals
 work in the same company for their entire
career
 or most of it, they will be very much specialized in the job that they are doing. They will
also
 be very comfortable and have better relationships with the existing employees which will make it easier for coordination and decision-making.
In contrast
, being very comfortable in their comfort zone will not push them to push themselves for
career
 advancements. In conclusion, I feel that it is very important that employees
change
 their workplaces since they could achieve their goals and excel in their careers much faster than others and
also
 exposing themselves to new environments will challenge them to grow whereas if you are in the same place after some time they will not be able to switch jobs even if they want to which is a very dangerous place to be in.
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