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Children's educaton is expensive. In some countries the government pays some of or all of the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Educating
children
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 in certain countries could be exorbitantly high whereas in other countries it could be more cost-effective, ,
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 it involves a cost which is either fully or partially paid by the
government
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 or public.
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 essay will include the advantages and disadvantages of governments paying for the
education
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 expenses of
children
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. In my opinion, I feel that the
government
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 should be ideally contributing to developing a literate generation either by partially or fully absorbing these expenses. The primary advantage will be developing intelligent and literate citizens. If
education
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 is charged, middle-income and lower-income earners might not allocate their disposable income to educate
children
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 as they might not consider "
education
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" as a basic need.
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, it is the
government
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's responsibility to ensure the citizens of the country get a fair amount of
education
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 despite income levels and
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 could be achieved if
education
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 is provided free or partially free.
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, since the
government
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 is collecting taxes from the public they are responsible for giving back to society. One of the ways they could do
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 is by allocating
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 tax money to
education
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.
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 will have a long-term impact and a better return on capital as the educated workforce will bring investors, and foreign currency and contribute to the overall development of the economy.
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 could be clearly seen in developed countries
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 as Canada where free
education
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 has changed the literacy levels of the citizens of the country.
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, the major disadvantage would be that free
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 will be misused in certain instances. The higher and upper-middle-income earners would
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 take advantage and have their
children
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 in
government
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 schools and universities.
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 might lead to a larger disparity of income within the country as a whole. In conclusion, In my opinion, I believe that
government
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 should at least contribute partially to educating
children
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 as
education
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 could be considered an investment and it will have long-term benefits that will outweigh the disadvantages.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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