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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student’s performance. Continual assessment such as coursework and projects is not satisfactory way to do this. Do you agree or disagree?

#examinations #student’s #performance #coursework #projects
People believe that
education
 is essential for everyone. There are many varieties of
assessment
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assessments
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 for
student’s
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students’
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education
level
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. I am disagreeing that formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a
student
’s performance. Analyzing the
education
 system, it is not
fair
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view
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 for all
students
 to decide with the formal examinations as well as the limitation of
the
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young children thinking will prove
this
.
Firstly
,
traditional
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 formal
examinations
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 system is not suitable for every
student
 because there are different types of individual
students
 in the schools.
For instance
, it is widely known that some
of
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the
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kids need to do learning or assessment with teamwork. Some
of
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pupils
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the pupils
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 have
came
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 out the good idea when they
doing
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project
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projects
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 or research with their
classmate
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classmates
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. It is good for
the
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students
 who like to do coursework and projects. As a good
results
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 of
project
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the project
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, it can use in the real life so many effects for the future.
Secondly
, formal
education
 and examination have
limitation
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limitations
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 for every
children
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.
For example
, one of my friends was working hard
student
and
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he
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who
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 studies regularly and he got
the
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high marks in
pre-exam
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.
However
, he has exam anxieties.
As a result
, he
had
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got
the
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lower marks in
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the exam
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exam
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exams
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. My friend is suitable
with
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 the coursework or project basic assessment.
Therefore
, every
student
is not match
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is not matched
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 with
formal
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the formal
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 examination. In summary, young children are
future
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 of the country.
Education
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 system should not decide on the examination and marks of
individual
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the individual
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student
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students
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 and It is not fair for their future.
Therefore
,
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 should be establishing the appropriate exam format for all
students
.
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