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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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Setting a
curfew
 exists in a certain region of the US that restricts teenagers from going out at late hours only if they are not accompanied by an adult.I think that there are some root reasons for
this
 action.It has pros and cons.
This
 essay will discuss both views.
First
 of all,It is obvious that in terms of crime rate, the US takes
first
 place.Even in spite of having sufficient security systems throughout the country,it suffers from offenders.
That is
 why it is important to take a tough step to protect adolescents from crimes
therefore
 the government set a
curfew
 for
children
.To give a clear explanation,thanks to
this
 restriction
children
's deaths have decreased drastically during the
last
 few years.
Furthermore
,some teenagers are more likely to be victims of crime because they are uneducated or are raised in broken families.These types of individuals are more inclined to be offenders
hence
 they should be kept under control by their parents,especially at night.
However
,one of the demerits of imposing a
curfew
 is that it restricts
children
's freedom because they are deprived of the town's nightlife.They are unable to go out with their peers and do free time activities.
As a result
,
this
 may create mental problems like anxiety and depression.
Additionally
,going out in the evening with only adults or parents will increase
children
's dependency on them. To conclude,
although
 some limitations for teenagers with regard to going outside at night in the US may have several disadvantages,
however
,I believe that imposing a
curfew
 will be profitable to preserve youth from the offence.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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