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Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #study #subjects #people #waste #time
Nowadays, A lot of university
student
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study
 various kinds of
subject's
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 they don't interested
.
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,
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 Few individuals
also
 believe that
the
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waste
 of
time
. I agree with
this
 notion, It's a
waste
 of money and
time
 resources and I will discuss
this
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To begin
 with the agreement, Many
college's
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colleges
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 coffered boring
subject
's for their
learners
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learner's
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 departments because
student's
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students
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 accept these tasks for their leisure
time
. To explain, because it's will be cheap cost and learning
a
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new things and it's will be useful in their career
such
 as a job opportunity.
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, In Australian news channels reveal that the Victoria school forces
for
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their
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students
student
studens
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students
study
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 boring assignments
such
 as Science and Maths.
Hence
, it's useful for learners as a chance to job in multimedia companies and
it's
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 will be beneficial for life. To commence with the disagreement, Jobs will
required
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 a good skill for their
emplooyers
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employers
employees
 and when the
student
learn
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 a
frequently
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 type of exams skills It's useful of their jobs
time
. To explicated, A lot of students should
waste
for
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their
time
 playing
in
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various kinds
for
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of
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 games on
internet
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.
However
, compared to
study
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studying
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 boring papers.
For instance
, The British students
for
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 their schools provided
a difficult tasks
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difficult tasks
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in
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during
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 their
study
time
 because Britain authorities thought the
student
 learn
a news skills
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news skills
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such
 as
developer
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sport's
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it
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will be good for their community.
Thus
,
It's depend
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 on the
student
 taste
what
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 they choose in future
study
 and it's not
waste
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 of
time
learned
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a
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different aspects. In conclusion,
Although
 all boring
subject
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subjects
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 will be
benefits
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 for their career
time
.
Moreover
, learners think is important they don't like any
subject's
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 but
i
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 will be useful in their hard times.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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