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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alterative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In today’s world, a lot of
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 are trying different treatments rather than visiting their doctor. I think
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 is a negative development because it causes a number of adverse effects on the health of
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. There are many reasons why
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 are reluctant to go to a hospital.
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,
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 find it convenient to treat diseases at less crowded places
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 as massage parlours the homoeopathic centres, and
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 saves time.
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, a person doing double shifts at a job could easily get homoeopathic medications from a pharmacy.
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, they find these remedies cheaper as compared to traditional
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, the public is
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 afraid of different tests
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 as tomography or colonoscopy because the cost of different diagnostic tests done to pinpoint the disease is expensive and they are usually not covered by health insurance.
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,
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 do not want to do regular check-ups with the physician because it is a time-consuming and tedious task. I think that alternative
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 with all its benefits has an overall negative impact on
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’s health because alternative medicines
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 as acupuncture or herbal tea have no scientific or logical explanation for treating diseases. These methods
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 provide temporary treatments and , they can make the symptoms worse in some cases because the person providing them has limited knowledge regarding
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.
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, aromatherapy use lavender to treat headaches, but they are not treating the root cause which could make
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 worse.
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, different methods could cause food poisoning or allergic reactions.
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, adverse reactions could occur by mixing homoeopathic medicines with prior traditional pharmaceuticals. In conclusion, while there are some benefits of alternative
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 as temporary relief and convenience for the public but in my opinion, it could lead to neglect of the root cause which could aggravate the disorder.
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