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You recently stayed at your friend’s place, to look after the house while he/she is away. You accidentally damaged something in his/her house. Write a letter to your friend and say - What was the accident? - When did it happen? - Suggest how the damage can be fixed.

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Dear Raj, How are you? Hope you are doing well and enjoying your holidays. I'm writing
this
 letter to you to apologize to you that
accidently
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accidentally
broke
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window
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the window
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 of your home. I really appreciate
you
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that you permitted me to stay in your
appartment
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apartment
 while I'm searching for
rental
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a rental
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 house. Yesterday while doing cleaning in your house, I
unfortunately
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 damage one of the bedroom window glass because I was in hurry to pick
the
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up the
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 bus for
office
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. In
this
 accident, I hurt my right hand very badly too. I know that you renovated
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apartment
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an appartment
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appartment
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apartment
 recently. So, I would like to assure you that please do not take tension about
this
. I will arrange
for
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fix
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a fix
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 and bear all the expenses. In fact, I've already spoken to
worker
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area
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 and he will replace the glass soon. Once again I'm really sorry to bother you on your holidays. Yours lovingly, Akash
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