Some people believe that the radio is the best way to get news, while others believe that TV is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many
individuals
argue that
radio
is
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good way to get
news
,while
their
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are some other
people
who believe that
that
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tv
is better for
news
.in my opinion
tv
is
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a much
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better way for all
the
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apply
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things. On the one hand,
radio
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the radio
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you can
use
any anywhere and get
news
.
In other words
,
radio
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the radio
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is easy to get anywhere it is convenient and in the old
people
do not have not much money for and a group of
people
use
a
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radio
for getting
news
and connection is easy to find any place so it is
good
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thing but in the old time when
people
do not have
much
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many
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sources and exchanging thing.
For example
, in the past when war
happen
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happens
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between two countries
government
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governments
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use
radio
to
information
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inform
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their
peoples
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people
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.
Hence
, in the past
radio
is better and
best
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the best
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by to get
news
.
On the other hand
, nowadays
individuals
using
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use
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smartphones
tv
for
news
entertainment
channel
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channels
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.
To
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instance, in the
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century
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a person mostly
use
tv
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the tv
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for
news
and movies ,
now days
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nowadays
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people
have mini
tv
(smartphones) which are in cheap prices and easy to carry, well by the
tv
individuals
see pictures and not only
news
kids get cartoon show and many more thing for entertainment and
tv
have more sources of
news
channels.
Thus
,
individuals
use
more
tv
to entertain
them self
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themself
themselves
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.
Lastly
, in my opinion, television is
best
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the best
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way to get
news
not only
their
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in their
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county as well as worldwide
,
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but,
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also
people
seeing
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see
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the picture and understanding the right thing and
Jugge
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Judge
by
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on
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their own.
For example
,
few
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a few
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days before
Ukrainian
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the Ukrainian
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and Russian war is the biggest live example. In the conclusion, in the past
radio
have there on
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benefits
benifits
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benefits
but now day technology are developed so television is the best
various
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variety
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for every purpose.
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