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Counties are becoming more and more similar because people are able to but the same product anywhere in the world do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, with the progress of
technology
 as we can see
people
 have similar welfare throughout the
world
. I strongly believe that
this
 is a good approach and
people
 can provide for many of their needs and
this
 will help them to live easier than before. There are many advantages to the advancement of
technology
. today
people
 can live similar to each other throughout the
world
.
in addition
, according to
this
 ,progress
people
 can have communication with each other and they are not alone and even they can know about each other condition
also
 they know a lot about the culture and civilisation related to
people
 who live in different areas of the
world
.
for example
, nowadays there are many facilities for interaction that
this
 cause person can familiar with new progress and they can buy many their needs by some internet websites, these websites send the product to whole of the
world
.
In contrast
. some
people
 think that
this
 is harmful because
this
 topic is a reason for changing many things in culture or
people
's behaviour.
furthermore
,
people
 want to have a lifestyle similar to a different person who lives in different parts of the area and
this
 is detrimental to society as well as governments can not prevent
people
 who want to live differently in comparison before.
For instance
. social media is a reason
people
 want to live in the form of luxury, in fact, these tools want to advertise
this
 lifestyle and they want to force
people
 for working hard
otherwise
, they can not reach good welfare. In conclusion, I strongly believe
this
 is a good approach and
people
 should use
technology
 in other they are living comfortably. they just must learn how to use
this
technology
 as well as
people
's life is similar to each other
this
 can be good and lead to
people
 having the same welfare.
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