Some people believe that children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other argue that adults should prevent them from doing so. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Mistake makes a human wise but
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mistake repeated twice can be considered
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a habit.
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nowadays tend to take their own decisions and often make mistakes, whereas some people believe that parents should have a close eye
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their
child
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children
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so that they can save
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from doing wrong things. In
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we will discuss both views to identify which is the right thing to be followed by people. Presently,
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has their own freedom including young adults. They often spend their time playing online games and
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with different individuals on social media platforms and
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their
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knowledge of current affairs. They meet different students in school and do things
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everyone is doing which might be wrong but it feels right as everyone is involved in doing it.
For example
, youngsters think it is cool or smart to consume alcohol and do drugs which gives them instant satisfaction but
this
can have negative implications on their health in future.
Therefore
, an
unspervised
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unsupervised
child
can cause more havoc to
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community. Parents should always have a close eye on their kids so that they can track their activities and guide them.
This
can lead to an extreme dependency on
parent
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and
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ability to take any decision can hamper. Constant watch over kids can
also
lead to
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rebellious
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a rebellious
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attitude
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in
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children
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which will not only make
him
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them
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angry but
also
develop hatred towards their guardians.
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, pupils tend to protect their
child
constantly from the
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problems which he needs to learn eventually will not block his growth mindset but will make him more dependable on external factors to complete any tasks. In my opinion, pupils should be allowed to supervise their
child
and help him if he is making an obvious mistake but give him the required freedom to learn his own lesson by his own experience which will not only stay with him for
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time but
also
grow his mental
awarness
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awareness
of surroundings.
Lastly
, it would be wise to say that, supervised mistakes are better than
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unsupervised
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these can have
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a ripple
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effect
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and hamper the future of a
child
.
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