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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain experience. Do the advantages of this outweigh the dissadvantages ?

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A new trend has emerged among
students
 where before undergoing
further
 education, they take a break to pursue their
otherwise
 latent interests or explore different destinations around the world.
This
 trend has great utility as travelling or pursuing other interests lead to more satisfaction and in many cases could lead to
greater
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 understanding of the kinds of problems the world needs solving for. Gaining new experiences is fundamental to
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 creativity and
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 the world through multiple lenses. In our rigid education system which follows a linear education model,
students
 these days are never exposed to radically different viewpoints or ideas. Creativity is all about combining pre-existing ideas in different combinations to come out with something radically different. To be exposed to something radically different
students
 do need to subject themselves to environments that can be relatively unknown or very difficult as well. The biggest business leaders have done
this
 time and time again to come up with new ideas and
students
 would thereby benefit in a similar manner.
On the other hand
, the
idea
 of a
gap
year
 may not be correct for everyone as they may ultimately slack off and waste the
year
 doing much of nothing. While
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 a
gap
year
 is a good
idea
 there will be many
students
 who might use
this
 to their full advantage and rather just use it towards unproductive
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activities
activites
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activities
 as opposed to pursuing unique experiences. So, while taking a break from studies can be a good
idea
, it
also
 depends on the self-regulation abilities of the student to actually make it useful and not waste it away. Overall, taking a
gap
year
 before university is a good
idea
 for many
students
 with the caveat that they actually do pursue something unique. A
gap
year
 has the potential to become a
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 experience and
therefore
 should be used judiciously by
students
.
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