These days, an increasing number of people in many cities know little about their neighbors and do not have a sense of community. What do you think are the causes and what solutions can you suggest?
Nowadays，an increasing number of
people
are narrowed their social circle，stopping actively meeting new people
.This
is leading neighbors
was just at a distance of a wall but Change the spelling
neighbours
longest
distance in mentality.I believe the cause for it Add an article
the longest
are
the advance Change the verb form
is
of
entertainment technologies and our modern life.Change preposition
in
However
，the government can do several steps to tackle this
issue and maximize social resource
.
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resources
Firstly
，It is obvious that electronic
changed the way Replace the word
electronics
people
entertain themselves.
There are several kinds of entertainment for people
to choose when
Change preposition
from when
people
are exhausted by the hustle and bustle of city life
For example
，not only can people
use their telephone to play games or watch movies but also
subscribe to one of the plenty streaming
services available
Change preposition
of streaming
That is
why local authorities must create some interesting events to make people
socialize more
A few solutions to tackle this
issue is that community
can Correct article usage
the community
held
Change the verb form
hold
an
Correct the article-noun agreement
a community fair
community fairs
community
fairs with craft
from Fix the agreement mistake
crafts
from
local Remove the redundancy
apply
individual
. Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
Moreover
，local sports competition
can be held by the local association in the Fix the agreement mistake
competitions
community
to attract different people
take
partFix the infinitive
to take
in
.
Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
，a number of negative news about community
was Correct article usage
the community
Correct your spelling
widespread
wide spread
Correct your spelling
widespread
from
the media ， decreasing Change preposition
in
confidence
Correct article usage
the confidence
by
Change preposition
among
community
of Add an article
a community
the community
people
，which make the
result of lacking Correct article usage
a
communicate
Replace the word
communication
in
the Change preposition
with
neighbor
.Change the spelling
neighbour
Therefore
，the government should create laws that reduce the passive and cause negative social impact news about the community
. At the same time，the government should often held
some positive public Change the verb form
hold
lecture
and broadcast something about Fix the agreement mistake
lectures
create
harmonious Wrong verb form
creating
community
idea
ln conclusion, our modern lives took us apart from our communities. Thus
, local authorities must do something to change this
. Some solutions are voluntary work and more social events so citizens could interact and meet new friends.Submitted by 416627367 on
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