Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

Thanks to top-notch technological innovations, particularly the
Internet
,
people
are able to follow the
news
on websites or social platforms.
However
, many
people
believe that
newspapers
are still the most vital source of
information
,
I
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bitterly disagree with them. Because I suppose that whereas
newspapers
are slow and hard for readers to find
news
, the
Internet
can provide
most
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information
in the quickest way. Traditional
newspaper
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newspapers
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can not offer the newest
information
for
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people
.
In particular
, when
people
read a
newspaper
, they just notice about the events, diseases… that happened yesterday, three days ago or even
last
week.
As a result
, these
people
will gradually go
backward
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in our mass communication society. What is more?
People
have difficulties in finding the
news
they need in
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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.
For instance
, should
people
want to find articles related to a topic,
newspapers
hardly do it effectively.
Therefore
, the
Internet
was invented to partly solve the problems
newspapers
have. When surfing
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webs
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web
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,
people
easily read a lot of articles about any
topics
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.
Additionally
, most of them are up-to-minutes
information
.
Furthermore
,
people
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if people
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want to know about any issue, they just write a
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keyword
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key word
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on search engines like Google,
they
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and they
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can find numerous posts related to that issue. All in all,
newspaper
are
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not common due to
its
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their
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efficiency, and
news
on the
Internet
have
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more merits.
Besides
, it is suggested that
people
should not believe too much
to
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these
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news
because
they
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may not accurate.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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