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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

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There has been an increasing number of people who read
news
 on the Internet. Despite
this
, I somewhat believe that
newspapers
 with continue to be an important source of
news
. There are a handful of reasons why
newspapers
 stay relevant
to
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these days.
Firstly
, they are cheap and affordable.
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Newspaper
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 generally cost very little, which helps the poor to keep up with the
news
 and get updates about the world’s status.
Secondly
, they are easy and simple to use. With the current advances
of
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 technology, many people, especially the elders, find it hard to keep up with the pace of development, so reading online
news
 may even be a challenge for them. By reading
newspapers
, they don’t have to try their best to understand technology just to read
news
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. Despite these advantages, it is undeniable that
newspapers
 are losing
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 role as a source of
news
.
This
 is because of its inconvenience. Unless you have
bag
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, you can’t always bring a newspaper with you, as they usually take up plenty of space.
Moreover
, they waste a lot of resources. To print a newspaper, you will have to waste ink, paper and money to do so, and as the world’s resources are running low, we need to save up as much of them as possible. In conclusion, while I agree that
newspapers
 are still
an
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invaluable sources of information, their popularity is starting to decrease.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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