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School are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students to find a job. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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Nowadays, Many schools are spending more time teaching historical
subjects
such
 as history.
However
, Few individuals believe
also
 that schools should teach any kinds of useful
subjects
such
 as English and computer they help in searching for jobs in their life. I agree with
this
 notion, it will be beneficial to learn new
skills
 and I will discuss them in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with the agreement, College Authority will be provided with many
frequently
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frequent
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 types of
subjects
such
 as computers. To explicated, The nation's government will be required useful
skills
 in high-paid work because International
industries
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industry
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 workers have so many different
skills
 they learn during their university time.
For example
, In Australian news channels reveal headlines that high-paid salaries will be beneficial
for
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in
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 their own way and in all popular industries
such
 as Nike
this
 brand job requires various kinds of
skills
.
Thus
, When students learn different
subjects
 in their Childhood time it will
also
 be useful in future. To commence with the disagreement, In school principals teach their nation traditional
subjects
 and
it
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its
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 well knows for their learner's.
Furthermore
, When childbirth in any region it will important to learn about
their
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the
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 country's historical age. To explain, Many governments know the history of their region and it will be useful to their upcoming generations.
For instance
, In Britain, all elementary schools will be taught their person to learn the British army history.
Hence
, it's will be useful to learn traditional paper and it will worth in
next
 years. In conclusion,
Although
 Both subject's exams will be beneficial to their personal life and countries.
Moreover
, Many job opportunities needed to see their employer all types of
skills
such
 as Thinking and communicating with others massive.
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