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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspapers #source
Internet
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 is evolving every single
days
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. That makes
news
to
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spread over the world. But it doesn’t mean
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is no longer important due to the accuracy of the information. All of that
make
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 me completely agree that newspapers and
news
 on the
Internet
 will both remain
important
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 source of
news
.
Firstly
, we have to talk about convenience.
News
 on the
Internet
 must be more convenient if
they
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were compared to the
newspaper
. Explaining
this
, we have already known that
newspaper
are
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 often oversized
,
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when
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while
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news
 on the
Internet
 only need a cell phone, which is smaller really much.
Secondly
, the price. To read newspapers, you have to buy from the publisher
with
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the
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a
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 cost
from
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of
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 5.000 VND to 12.000 VND. It seems to be small but if you read a 5.000 VND
newspaper
everyday
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every day
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, you will totally lose 150.000 per month, which is pretty expensive for updating the
news
. In case of reading
news
 on
Internet
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the Internet
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, you won’t have to pay anything.
Last
 but not least,
newspaper
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newspapers
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 have to be more accurate than the
news
 on the
Internet
. Because the publisher will check if their newspapers are completely correct. While everyone can make their
news
 and publish it on the
Internet
.
With
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these reason
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this reason
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, I completely agree that
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
news
 on the
Internet
 will both remain
important
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an important
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source
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sources
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 of
news
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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