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University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 word

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Over a decade, there is a heated debate going on that Taking complete
Eductionis
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Education is
 too expensive due to
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the university
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university
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university's
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 huge
fee
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fees
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.
This
 has started shattering the dreams of numerous
students
to study
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studying
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.In
This
 essay, I will shed
up
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apply
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a
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apply
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light on whether
education
 should be free to everyone or should take
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a fee
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fee
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fees
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 from
students
 , regardless of income. I opine that
the
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education
 should be non-chargeable.
Education
 has always played a crucial part
for
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in
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 the development of human
being
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beings
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 so that they can learn
the
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skills and build their career. Across the globe in all countries,Affording good
education
 has become a nutcracker job for parents due to hefty
fee
 structure.Due to
this
 , Many
students
 didn’t get
the
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admissions
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admission
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in
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to
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 prestige
college
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colleges
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 and they stop
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the study
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study
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studying
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.
This
 results in
the
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unemployment as people don’t have skills.
Moreover
,
These situation
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this situation
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also
 increases
the
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suicide rates and other crime.
Addition
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In addition
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 to
this
,
Students
 suppose to take a loan
on
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at
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 huge interest rates to complete
the
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their
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 study and it takes a decade to repay the loan which puts
students
into
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under
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 mental pressure.
 In
few
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a few
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 countries like Canada and Australia, the
education
fee
 is very minimal or nil.
This
Results
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results
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 in more literacy rate
of
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in
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nation
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the nation
a nation
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 which helps to hike the
economy
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economic
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 rate of
country
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the country
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. According to
survey
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a survey
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 conducted by Harvard,The
country
 offering free
education
 produces more
enterpreneurs
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entrepreneurs
 and make Student
self sufficient
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self-sufficient
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 to earn good money.
Country
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A country
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 like Canada has
came
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come
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 into
developed
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the developed
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 nation list from
developing
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the developing
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 nation list which is
big
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a big
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 achievement. To conclude, Universities should make
the
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education
 free for everyone and To combat
this
 , Government should take
necessary
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the necessary
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 steps to resolve
this
 issue which will
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definitely
definately
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definitely
 increase the literacy rate,
skilled
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the skilled
a skilled
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 talent of
country
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the country
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 and generate more employment.
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