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Some think that governments should tax unhealthy foods to encourage people to eat healthier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The chart displays the average percentage of 3
variety
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 of nutrients present in our diet, which can be unhealthy if eaten more than usual. If we are talking about
sodium
,
then
the
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dinner constitutes 43
percent
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 of our
sodium
 intake. The other big
portion
 of 29
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 of our
sodium
 intake comes from our lunch. The remaining supply of
sodium
 to our body comes from breakfast and snacks. Talking about saturated fat which is
also
 an important nutrient in our daily diet. The dinner
consist
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 of 37
percent
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 of saturated fat, another big
portion
 comes from lunch and snacks which makes 26
percent
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, and 21
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 of our saturated fat. The
last
 16
percent
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 comes from breakfast. Another key component of our nutrient intake is added sugar.
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 big
portion
 of 42
percent
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 of added sugar comes from snacks. The remaining
portion
 is divided into 3 parts of 23% from dinner, 19% from lunch, and 16% from breakfast.
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