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Electric mobility devices such as scooters, rollers, segways and hoverboards are becoming very popular tools for commuting in the city. Discuss advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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With the increasing pollution and decreasing petroleum ,resources electric vehiclesvehicals are introduced to us. City people are very happy to use these new technology-based devices in their daily commute. They find it comfortable to drive. We tend to get irritated by the noise created by cars, bikes and other vehicles.
On the contrary
, electric mobility devices do not produce any sound while moving. We are
also
 familiar with the air and the water pollution created by them. The main advantages of these vehicles are they do not create any trouble for humans and nature. The electricity consumption to charge its batteries is very less in comparison to Petrol, Diesel or CNG.
Also
, these devices have a long life. Since they are not harming nature, govt cannot put any age limit on them. It has only one disadvantage. They are very expensive to purchase that a lower and lower-middle-class person cannot afford them. Since
this
 is a new technology, there are no
second
-hand scooters or cars to buy at
this
 time. Though we understand about production cost is high but the fact is we may lack natural resources by the year 2050. The government needs to help to provide any kind of concession to the people who cannot afford it. So that we can use more and more vehicles and save our mother nature.
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