Some people think computers and the internet are important in children's study, but others think student s can learn more effectively in school and with teachers. Discuss both views and give your own openion,

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The increasing
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of using
technology
for education highly affects
students
' lives. Some experts believe that
students
can be addicted to computers
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internet if we allow them to use
it
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often.
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some people think
this
is a new way of learning, using
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technology
can help children in many ways. In the following paragraph, both views will be outlined in detail.
To begin
with, in
traditional
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the traditional
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way at
school
, teachers always teach their
students
in classes.
This
condition has some
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benefits
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because not only
students
can ask or discuss with their teachers directly but
also
they are more interactive when they
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with their friends
for example
when
teacher
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a teacher
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assigns
a
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group work,
students
will make a little conference in their group in the same room and share some idea with each other which is effective learning.
However
, some situations will affect
learning
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process
for example
COVID-19
situation
making people all over the world keep social distancing to protect themselves. The
situation
makes dramatically
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in
school
because they have to change to
online-learning
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. Using
online-learning
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is a better way for the
situation
because
students
can learn by using simulation. Some research showed that when
students
have to do some
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activities, some
students
will be scared and shy, but if you use
simulation
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a simulation
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situation
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the
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shyness of them.
Moreover
, using
internet
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the internet
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can help
students
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teacher question whenever they
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wany
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by sending messages. In conclusion, it can be seen that both views
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useful in real life and very effective. In the future
technology
will be played an important role in every place including
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school
so I suggest learning paper-based at
school
and using
computer
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computers
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and
internet
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the internet
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to practice some simulation.
However
, it depends on the
situation
, teacher and student's ability to use the
technology
.
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