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ome say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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There are many people who suggest marrying the
love
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 of
life
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, while others believe that in
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 modern era of being practical someone's wedding for
wealth
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 is a wiser decision.
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 topic is elaborated by focusing on the pros and cons of supporting a situation I have come across. On the one hand,
marriage
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 is all about understanding and compromises between a
couple
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. A good understanding can happen only when you
love
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 a person.
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, it is very important to know and
love
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 the person someone wishes to marry.
Wealth
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 should always be the secondary aspect. Understanding between couples defines many ways of leading a
life
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 together with many different situations and mostly the kid's planning. Marrying a stranger for money may suffer an understanding between couples even when they have a lot of
wealth
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 and high status in
life
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.
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, a
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 in
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love
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marriage
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 can stick longer even when they do not have high
wealth
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.
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 a
couple
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 tries to satisfy each other, make memories with small things and cherish the moments, have proper kid planning and support each other in all the ways of difficulties with no ego.
On the other hand
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 in today's
world
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, it is really not practical to choose a partner someone loves over
wealth
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. For
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 reason being, even to have a middle-class
life
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 in the metropolitan city needs either earning from both partners or having financial support due to the high expenses and daily needs.
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 to that, a
couple
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 can enjoy their
life
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 much better by having a
world
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 tour, buying a car of their choice and maintaining a status in society which is nearly impossible and takes a lot many years if you have a
love
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marriage
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 with no financial support.
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, a
couple
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 always wishes to have a
world
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 tour in their vacation time, buy a flat, give their a high-class school education, and buy a standard car which will automatically build a bond between a
couple
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 when they have all their needs satisfied in inturn
marriage
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 will stick long with status in society. To brief a situation, my friend from a rural family married a lower-class family girl who was not financially strong but they loved each other a lot.
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 a
couple
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 was able to understand each other very well and was living a happy
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 in a rented apartment and performing their duties.
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 was possible because
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 the girl was from a poor family and was very much aware to handle difficult situations which was the biggest advantage to their successful married
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. On the other part, another friend who was very rich and married a middle-class family girl with an arranged
marriage
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 did not stick long simply because they had
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 quarrels, comparisons and an ego to satisfy each other basic needs.
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, the
marriage
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 did not
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 long. To conclude,
marriage
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 is all about understanding and compromise.
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 is possible only when there is
love
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 between a
couple
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 that money cannot buy even when the
world
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 is uncertain.
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