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The maps below show the changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.

The maps depict the information about modifications in a town called Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
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, in the early ,time it was more likely an agricultural area which is converted into a residential area in 2000. In 1780, in the middle of the town there were four farms and a
river
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 on the west
side
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 but in 1860 farms were reduced twice in number and add-on of
the
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 bridge to cross the
river
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.
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was.
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 In the early years, on the northeast
side
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 of the
,
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area there was a
village
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 of 100 homes which doubled in a later year. In 1780, the south-east
side
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 part was full of woods which reduced over time. In 2000, numerous changes happened to start with a number of shops opening
along with
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river
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 and
new
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 road on the north
side
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 which is connected to the
village
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. On the southwest end of the
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river
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 there was an add-on of wetland for birds.On the opposite of
it
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 new facilities like schools and sports
field
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fields
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 were built which are connected to the
village
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 by a road. In 2000, there was a massive change in the
village
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 where 500 homes were built for residents.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words river, side, village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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